sorry guys i posted the script twice sorry pleas read and feel free to make comment and suggestion the we are still struggling to come up with a good title and the script could be tighter . so any advice will be is welcomed please . tell me if u think the content has any redundancies and in terms of "grand ma's" story and how we could illustrate it. the emphasis is to make the piece shorter and as expressive as possible

thank u in advance

akleyolton